1) https://youtu.be/MDOQPtzTx5Q
2) I didn't really get much feedback between my first and second elevator pitches. During my first I was critiqued based on my speaking tempo as well as what additional information I could incorporate. I took that critique and added it to my second pitch. For my second pitch the feedback was really positive acknowledging the improvement. So, I didn't really change anything for this last one but I felt a lot more comfortable in the execution.
3) Although I didn't change any dialogue I changed my tone and enthusiasm. I knew the pitch much better and found myself pausing and stuttering much less.
Hi Katherine,
ReplyDeleteI definitely would say you seemed a lot more confident and comfortable with this elevator pitch and you had a lot more enthusiasm. I noticed you got a lot better with keeping a steady pace and didn't pause as much as before, so your memorization is definitely showing! My only suggestion, now that you seem comfortable with your pitch, would be try to be more dynamic with your gestures. At times it seemed like you could add more gestures, or if you frame the camera farther away, you could walk a little as if you were presenting this in a class or conference room. Otherwise your pitch is looking great!
Hey Katherine,
ReplyDeleteAfter watching your third pitch, I immediately noticed the improvement of the speed of your presentation. At first you sounded rather slow and long pauses made me feel like one was waiting, but in this pitch you spoke faster while still remaining clear. I could also tell the self-conscious attempt to be more enthusiastic and I think it worked. Good job.